Please Review my Muse in progress..

[Marianne]

Hi all...
I have been lurking here for a while..what a great resource of support these forums are.
I would like comments about my muse..I am just finishing up the recordings now. I have not tested this muse really as it did not cost me anything much other than my own time to put together.
I am a graphic designer by trade but do not know much about Sales..I am learning all I can while holding down a full time job.
For some reason I find myself stalling with this..there is some fear of "putting it out there.."..

what do you all think?..any advice welcome..

http://bodymindweightloss.com/

[JPress]

Originally Posted by Marianne

Hi all...
I have been lurking here for a while..what a great resource of support these forums are.
I would like comments about my muse..I am just finishing up the recordings now. I have not tested this muse really as it did not cost me anything much other than my own time to put together.
I am a graphic designer by trade but do not know much about Sales..I am learning all I can while holding down a full time job.
For some reason I find myself stalling with this..there is some fear of "putting it out there.."..

what do you all think?..any advice welcome..

http://bodymindweightloss.com/

I like the look, just not the lay out.

One school of thought comes from journalism. You have to think about your web page as a news paper. Everything you need to know to take action has to happen before you scroll down

- problem
- solution
- way to take action

To be fair, a lot of those super long scroll through the entire page to get to the action button, convert fairly well.

Other than that, I really like the changing testimonials.

[Ileana]

Hey Marianne, I like your site graphics. And I think the product you're selling is a great idea

However, I do think your sales page is a little confusing. And I would actually prefer if your sales letter was just one column read from top to bottom

Also, I think the word hypnosis comes off a little too strong for the general audience (I guess it depends on who you're targeting) and it might scare some people away (negative associations for some). May I suggest the use of a term like "suggestibility"? I have a magic/conjuring background and I know for a fact that not everyone is highly suggestible but some are more prone to being 'hypnotised' than others. Just food for thought I guess

Hope that helps!

[Marianne]

Thanks for the input. Really valuable as I'd been tweaking the site as I developed the product and in the process the message got a bit garbled.
Ive redesigned the page..now just to upload the actual products!!!