My Muse Is Finished!! Comments please...

[cartoonfan1983]

Please take a look at my Muse.... I think it's going to do really well.

I was having problems in the past with getting clicks, but I added some more popular keywords (like dating) and got better results.

What do you guys think about this niche?

Here's the site for your critique: http://www.loveyoudeserve.com


Thanks in advance for your help on this!

[Vacman]

I like it!

I really think the site design and overall sales copy is really good.

I didn't read the whole thing through word for word, but one of the things I would do is to stay away from vague words such as "various media sources" as it can put doubt into readers’ heads. They could be thinking... "What media sources? If they won't tell me then maybe they are lying/exaggerating, etc."

Also, I'd make the "Buy Now" button bigger, and a bit flashier. And I'd probably say something other than "Buy Now." Maybe, "Download Your Copy Today!" or "Secure Your Copy Today!" Or something like that.

I also might give a "sneak peak" into the program to instill trust in your potential customers.

Overall I really like it, and the graphic up top is perfect! I like how the girl is toasting the guy's drink while he just sits there, it's like he doesn’t even have to try

Really cool stuff! How long have you had this for? Some of the testimonials say it's been out for years, did you make this yourself or are reselling the product?

[cartoonfan1983]

Originally Posted by Vacman

I like it!

I really think the site design and overall sales copy is really good.

I didn't read the whole thing through word for word, but one of the things I would do is to stay away from vague words such as "various media sources" as it can put doubt into readers’ heads. They could be thinking... "What media sources? If they won't tell me then maybe they are lying/exaggerating, etc."

Also, I'd make the "Buy Now" button bigger, and a bit flashier. And I'd probably say something other than "Buy Now." Maybe, "Download Your Copy Today!" or "Secure Your Copy Today!" Or something like that.

I also might give a "sneak peak" into the program to instill trust in your potential customers.

Overall I really like it, and the graphic up top is perfect! I like how the girl is toasting the guy's drink while he just sits there, it's like he doesn’t even have to try

Really cool stuff! How long have you had this for? Some of the testimonials say it's been out for years, did you make this yourself or are reselling the product?

I wrote the book a couple years ago, but spent the past weeks updating and streamlining the book. I then went about fleshing out the product (adding a DVD, journal, etc. to add value) since making the site. It really came a long way.

So, some of the testimonals are for the "older" product that I created, but
they still help explain the product a little better.

I am working on fixing a couple things like the "buy now" buttons for paypal. I need to create a "call to action" like buy now! or something similar, but since I refused to make an ebook product, I have a product that requires mailing. I feel (and again, this is just my opinion) that people put a premium value on tangible goods (at least at this point) so it was my goal to have something to ship.

Thanks for the tips and positive feedback. My site is still a work in progress.

[atiff]

Hey Cartoonfan

I dont mean to be a prick, but the site was not appealing to me. It didn't seem to have a "CREDIBLE" feel to it. Not sure how to fix that, but that is my 2 cents.

[Tony Lukasavage]

Dating and love is an emotional topic, its seems like your site design should better reflect that. It seems a bit drab and way too heavy on the text. You should move your testimonials into that empty left pane and be sure to add some pictures to them. I think more visuals will help alot, specifically with this type of content.

[Marcie]

Hey man! - try changing your font to Verdana 10 or 12 pt, I think it is the font that is disagreeing with me most, I'll look more later! Congrats!

[cartoonfan1983]

atiff - thanks for your input. I want that kind of feedback the most.

Tony - thanks for the advice... maybe I should tone down more of my text. Will look into that

Marcie - I will work on changing the font to Verdana. I assumed that Times would be better because of the serifs and being such a large block of text.

Thanks so very much for all your tips folks. Keep the ideas coming!

[Vacman]

cartoonfan1983,

Just remember, the entire purpose of the message or, "sales copy" is to convert readers into happy customers!

I don't claim to have all the answers, because it is a complicated topic, but this guy has a great site with a lot of helpful articles.

I would check it out:

http://www.successdoctor.com/

[Marcie]

Originally Posted by cartoonfan1983

atiff - thanks for your input. I want that kind of feedback the most.

Tony - thanks for the advice... maybe I should tone down more of my text. Will look into that

Marcie - I will work on changing the font to Verdana. I assumed that Times would be better because of the serifs and being such a large block of text.

Thanks so very much for all your tips folks. Keep the ideas coming!

serifs are preferable in print, sans-serif for online esp. blocks of text.

My only other comment right now is, your shopping cart doesn't give a lot of confidence in security, are there some images or something you can add to make the customer feel more secure giving you their credit card?

[final_id]

Serifs in general tend to be more readily readable. The little flaggies were invented and deliberately perpetuated to increase readability. But they can make a field of text look "busy" and also remind us, subjectively, of something from a newspaper or a textbook ("dry" or boring material rather than flash bang whiz).