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[kamakiri]

I will just leave this here:

The New World of Publishing: Editing and Proofing

I am step 2 of indie publishing. Email me for my rates.

[weinerschizel]

Originally Posted by kamakiri

I will just leave this here:

The New World of Publishing: Editing and Proofing

I am step 2 of indie publishing. Email me for my rates.

Thanks for the offer... I've been picked on for my poor english skills since being a kid. I'm more of a math guy.

...I completely re-wrote my http://www.keystoaz.com/madera-canyon post. I noticed it had a couple major flaws...

1. I had no clear audience. I re-wrote the article imagining I was trying to convince my friends to visit Madera Canyon.

1. My CTA was WAY too complicated. I had several goals when I really needed to focus on one. My original goal was just to get them to share the article. So I erased all the secondary goals and made the final statement push them to share the article.

1. I needed to push the focus from myself and where I live to instead conveying a major benefit to the reader. The benefit probably sill isn't perfectly described. The main push of the article / benefit is intended to be, that an adventure in a beautiful place will erase your life stresses.

Hopefully somebody learns from me documenting my exercises on here. I didn't save the previous revisions, just my thoughts

I'm currently split testing headlines to see which one gets the most shares (my goal). I hope to make this article so that people continually share it thus pumping traffic to my site.

[weinerschizel]

I've had quite a few responses to this post. And have also been mentoring a couple local entrepreneurs.

My marketing is nothing great but slowly rolling in more and more money each month. Since this post my crappy foot stretcher ad as generated over $600 in sales

That said, I know my stuff is nothing great but it does not hold me back. Many of the people I've been working with are scared to even start. They are afraid of the criticism and being in the public with their marketing.

So I created a short video to hopefully elevate any fears one could experience...

Click here to view my *ahem* sub-par *ahem* Youtube Video on Taking Action