Headline Help

[Live Free]

Hi - I understand the headline is the most important part of a sales letter. I am not convinced mine is doing the job right now. If anyone has any ideas on how to improve this, I would be very grateful! PM me if you prefer.

My current headline is: Discover the Secrets that will Show You How To Sky Rocket Your Sales and Reap Abundant Profits from Your Retail Business!

[JET]

The book "Think Two Products Ahead" was helpful to me in thinking/working with headlines...my two cents.

[MLMGenie]

One problem is your headline is TOO long! :eek:

"Discover the Secrets that will Show You How To Sky Rocket Your Sales and Reap Abundant Profits from Your Retail Business!"

Try this one instead...:)


Amazing Retail Secrets Reveal How To Sky Rocket Your Profits!


Good Luck!
MLMGenie

[Matthew Connors]

Whats your keyword, i can only see "sales" as your keyword

Include your keywords and an emotive and quality word.

Shorten it its too long

EG: Secrets Revealed To Explode Your Sales Profits

Absolutely positively make sure your keywords are in your heading and in your domain name