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[Gongchime]

I put together two different ways of presenting my product. The second one here is a transformation of the PX Method. Let me know what I can combine, what I need to drop, what I need to improve etc... I'm ready to pay the webdesigner to start on the website's development.

Thanks,
Greg

The Write Song

Turn any melody into at least 3 and easily many more new melodies. Compose better music faster. Compose like a pro.

The Write Song HyperCourse by Gregory Alan Turner

See professional reviews of my course at Richard Boworth.org

Dear Composer:
Been waiting what seems like a thousand years to release your inner creativity?

Do you already possess a natural skill for creating effective new music but like many budding composers have not yet been able to find it?

Do you already know how to create new music?

Take this test:
List to any melody.
Now create at least 4 new good melodies based on the original. Play your most cherished music. Listen to the best part. How can you do as all of your guitar heroes have done before you and create new music in the styles that you love just by listening to that style?

No idea? No problem…

Many composers are amazed when they find out they don’t consciously have access to the most basic tools even though they listen to, play and try to compose music everyday.

But with just a few mind expanding guidelines, we bet you can compose like a pro and it doesn’t matter your current level of competence.

How? With each point building on the one before, you’ll achieve compositional bliss with The Write Song HyperCourse by Gregory Alan Turner-the best compositional method out there, proven at...and by musicians in 120 countries.

You’ll get the secret for releasing your innate compositional ability.

Here on 2 mind expanding CDs you will learn how to compose without any further outside assistance.
You’ll get the simple, extensively tested, solutions to the compositional mysteries that even many professionals don’t know consciously-directly from Gregory Alan Turner-that empower you to:
Generate
Transform
Place in Context
Etc…
Want evidence?
On the first CD you’ll get direct experience of its truth.

Next page Generative and Transformational Procedures The Phenomenon

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Melody Composition HyperCourse
You get 2 audio CDs
With a 40 page book, 10 page quick start guide,
Pluse a free bonus CD on Composing for Video Media and accompanying pamphlet.

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The Write Song an Effective Compositional Technique

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Expert Systems make the difference. l How quickly can I improve?
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Why did I go from a completely unknown to being featured in Qualidade De Vida magazine? Simple-this method is effective.

Expert Systems make the difference: Developed and tested by Professional Composers and Expert System computer programmers.

The most popular composition courses are based on building up short motifs but compositional facility is based on the ability to transform existing music. See our unpaid testimonials page for feedback from composers who have used other methods prior to The Write Song.

The Write Song, in contrast, was developed by analyzing the largest number of expert composers ever. What is the science behind its effectiveness? The commonalities among top composers was isolated and combined with Expert System computer programming approaches to provide a user-friendly system for giving beginning and intermediate composers the capabilities to compose alongside the top 1% in the world in less than 2 hours. Counted in years and thousands of man hours of investigation and experimentation, the Write Song has been repeatedly proven as the most effective step-by-step procedure in the world for increasing compositional effectiveness and speed of output.

The Write Song is specially designed to give you a way to realize your potential of competing with the top 1% as quickly as possible.

How quickly can I improve with this program?
A level of speed unattainable with months of conventional training can be achieved in a matter of hours with The Write Song.

How much would you pay to compose three times as much music or significantly more than you already have in your music collection by other composers and of the same high quality? And do it in the same amount of time you already spend composing?

With the Write Song you can quadruple your output and increase your effectiveness in a matter of days.

Many composers have indicated that they spend ….per week composing music and produce X number of songs.

Many composition programs and composition software cost over $500. What do you get for your $500? How to create a motif, repeat it, and vary it then have no idea where to create the next phrase let alone a whole song or a whole album of music or how the idea you just created fits into the context of the section of music it’s in. And you’re lucky if you get that. Most music composition software is nothing of the sort. It’s merely sequencing and notation software. In differentiating them from The Write song, it has a proven track record of scientifically increasing a composer’s quality and quantity of output.

How do you learn to compose faster?

The Write Song was developed to eliminate all unnecessary processes that do not contribute to speed and quality.

Once the elements are understood, you can eliminate all wasted motion and compose faster while increasing quality at the same time. Composing is a mental process limited by creative vectors. Your mental processes can be reset to create huge leaps in both speed and quality.

No serious student should spend money on any method that goes against the facts which are a part of the mental process of composing.

There are several goals one must cognate to improve the compositional process.

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What Does The Write Song Contain?

The Write Song educates each course taker through processes which build on each other, representing the first time that advanced computer programming science has been presented in normal language into a highly efficient presentation that gets to the results lightening fast.

All composition is dependent on generating good ideas and transforming them. The Write Song is scientifically engineered to eliminate useless processes and increase speed through training in generational and transformational procedures in under 2 hours. It doesn’t just present the root of the process such as transforming short motifs into something only slightly longer with no indication about how that fits into the context of a composition. That isn’t even good for young children. The Write Song gets to the flowers and fruits of the compositional process without wallowing unnecessarily long down in the fundament. You get results fast, guaranteed.

The Complete 2-Volum Write Song Melody Composition Hyper Course Includes:

Quickstart Guide (10 pages)

Coursebook (40 pages)

2 Audio CDs

Bonuses Video Media blah blah CD

and text pamphlet.

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By participating in this proven program you will learn never before seen secrets of hypercomposing the same as the top computer music composition programs in the world, including;

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[webgal]

Which one is your headline? At any rate, I can't figure out which one is but you don't have anything that is compelling for a headline yet. You've got to snatch them out of their seat with your offer.

[Gongchime]

Perhaps adcopy was the wrong word to use. Its the body of a website. The name of the product and also the name of the website is "The Write Song". If that shouldn't be the headline then I don't know what should. Maybe you could help me out. The "Headline" of the PxMethod is The PXMethod. And the Headline for The Perfect Pitch SuperCourse is The Perfect Pitch SuperCourse. Am I missing something?

Thanks,

Greg

I also thought it might be good to include something from the first two chapters such as;

Now I’m going to make some outrageous claims. This course is unique because there are students who are the inspiration behind this course that studied from the largest number of experts and studied more intensively with those experts than any other students who have ever lived. It might be an outrageous claim but it’s true. Now they have become teachers and are ready to teach us. Our new teachers have learned to consistently do what our favorite musicians do: to create new and effective compositions. And do it both quickly and easily. Even better than that, they can explain to us how we can also start doing that right away. I won’t tell you who our new teachers are just yet but it will become clear shortly. They won’t be teaching you everything that is normally taught in university composition courses whether pop/rock, classical or jazz. And yet what you take away will be good enough to make experts and the average listener believe that you too are also an expert. At that moment you will actually BE an expert.

There are now computer musical composition systems that are able to convince experts and average listeners that the computers are expert humans playing music. The listeners can't see that the music is being played by a computer. The people programming the systems are able to teach something as dumb as a computer to create music good enough to fool experts and the average listener. They can teach us a thing or two.

What are the programmers teaching the computers to do? The programmers teach the computers what expert humans do. Research indicates that people who have composing careers tend to start with the big picture and work down toward the details. Amateurs do the opposite but pros are able to think up and compose several parts at once while considering the relationship between them and even to compose from the top down and from the bottom up simultaneously. Amateurs write one bar at a time and have no idea how that part affects the others. Pros have a rhythmic approach to melody writing and amateurs don’t. Frequently amateurs only focus on pitches. The pitches are of secondary importance to rhythmic considerations. Actually, the form, overall length, section lengths, and phrase lengths are just larger rhythms. They are periodicities that occur infrequently compared with individual notes and rhythms but are just as important as the smaller details and help give the smaller details somewhere to reside. Although an expert may know how to do many seemingly complex things, one of the things that separate him or her from the amateur is how to simplify and categorize their vast knowledge into a structure that is small and manageable.

In the beginning of the history of expert systems, programmers thought if they just asked experts and also observed them, that it would be easy to find out what the experts were doing.
It turned out to be much more difficult. Experts sometimes can’t communicate what they’re doing or the variables are so numerous that a busy person can’t take the time to cover EVERYTHING they know how to do. The other issue is that the programmers didn’t know the right questions to ask.
This isn’t any different than a teacher with a student. Only in that case, the student is a computer. Some people say that composition can’t be taught, yet even with all of the difficulties, people still try to teach it and to learn it from a mentor of some sort.

The field of expert systems has grown a lot since the beginning. Experts have dug deeper into their psyches and more intimately revealed their thought processes and the programmers have started asking better questions. It’s still not perfect but it doesn’t need to be perfect for our purposes.
I’ve got a Boss BR1180 Digital Recording Unit. Acquaintances said it’s not good enough nowadays. I said that I have a Mac G4 computer and ProTools recording software also but didn’t always need to use them in many cases because the Boss BR1180 is better than anything the Beatles ever had. Clearly, it’s good enough.

An experienced recording engineer will know what to do with a cheap SM57 microphone and make it sound the best it can. Often, an amateur won’t be able to make a $400 mic sound as good as the pro with a cheaper mic.

If you convert a music file to mp3, it leaves out a lot of data but most people can’t tell the difference. The reason is because it presents the most important aspects with more detail, the less important aspects with less detail and leaves out the rest. Again, the amount of data not being used might be fairly large but the difference is virtually imperceptible. This course on melody and solo composition is similar to those examples.

If you’re in a band and you want to play your own original material, how do you create the music? You don’t just pull it out of thin air. Your thoughts as a musician have been existing in a historical context since the day you were born. What did your favorite musicians do to start creating their own original music? Usually, people start out copying their favorite groups and artists. But if you just copy them, it’s not original. To make it original you have to change something. Maybe you keep the rhythm for the rhythm guitar part but you change the chords or you keep the chords and change the rhythm.

This is similar to what the programmers of expert systems are teaching their computers. But it has to be done in a way that doesn’t turn the good input into crappy output. That’s part of the difficulty. Lots of people have tried just changing things a bit and have been unsuccessful in consistently putting all of the elements together in an aesthetically pleasing direction. Only a lucky few make that work. There are a lot of things you can screw up in the process of creating a song. And you only need to screw up one of them to put a blight on all the rest.

It might take a normal person studying alone ten years to get a handle on composing. But a programmer can download all of an expert’s or several expert’s knowledge over the course of only a few days. Then the computer can integrate that into its function very quickly. But only if the programmer knows what the computer will be able to do effectively. Computers aren’t people. Early on in the history of computer music composition, too much of the output was inferior to a normal person’s expectations and the programmer had to wade through tons of crappy music to find something passable at the end of it all.

[Keep a Movin' Dan]

Hmmm... as someone who wanted to do music at one point in his life, I'd put a little less emphasis on the system, more emphasis on the customer. Something like: "You've wanted to be a composer for a long time, you have ideas which you're sure would work wonderfully, but you don't quite know how to develop them..."

Also, I wouldn't do a full excerpt, though the material you quote there is important. The idea that computers can write music is good proof that a system can work, it needs to be early in the ad copy.

[Gongchime]

I like what you said, Mr. "Keep-A-Movin", about focusing on the customer. I was thinking though that some customers will not have had ANY previous ideas.

And your thought: using evidence that computers can do it is good proof, but you'd like to see that earlier in the text and less of it. Only the important points. I think I understand you.

Got it.