First muse web ready! Comment!

[Zenit]

I'm finishing! The domain isn't bought yet and I'm trying to create a PayPal account to put an online cart. Bad English corrected by froldt. I'd grabbed some pictures to make it more attractive.

HERE (http://ide.synthasite.com/sites/De49/D4cf/D1df/D593/U8a4986c81d2e18c5011d395fd1fc494e/8a4986ca1daed34d011dece179520356/index.php)

Critics or comments will be welcome. Regards.
Zenit

[Arjan]

Hi Zenit,


To start I want to give some positive feedback; I like the way you have used these free sources for designing the site yourself. My way of having a site made by a professional is good for the eyes, but bad for the wallet.

I have read the entire message, and productwise you might be onto something, but I have no idea what the product is -except for a learning method- and how one could benefit from its features. So it needs beefing up in this department.

Furthermore you really need a native speaker to take a look at the English. Any site in the realm of education should be flawless in grammar and spelling, and it's far from flawless right now. This is your major achilles heel I think.

Hope this helps,

Arjan

[Sven]

I second that.

And, two more things:
The picture of the books at the top is too big (it takes up half the page) And the FREE tools have links at the bottom that lead customers away from your site.

Not the best way in my opinion. It is too cheap. But it may be a great way to test ideas and then get your own hosting.

[Zenit]

Thank you for the critics. I have to improve a lot the web design, the content and the English. However, do you think that a learning method is a good idea? The market in wich is targeted is very big and don't think this will work as a well-made muse.

Please continue commenting and let me know your opinion.

[clanshrapnel]

I like the clean design, but you will want to upgrade the quality of the 'books' picture at the top. There appears to be some visible artifacts, probably because it's a low quality picture. That will detract from your company image.

[Zenit]

I'm thinking in making it in Spanish because I'm a native speaker, but here the compentence is bigger than in England or the US. However, can you tell me if this product makes sense or if it really worths (in English or in Spanish)?

[Zenit]

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[froldt]

As a current university student, I would be interested in anything that will my my time here easier. I want to learn as much as possible (ie: get the best grades possible), with the smallest amount of time invested.


I am interested, but I want to know more. I don't think you need a separate page explaining the method. Add it to the end of the page, with a link that sends you down to it.
You could probably narrow this down to a single long page (see Tim's example, link in the book. Copy that format with your information/pictures.)
Who are you? Become an "expert" and let us know more why we should trust you.
Don't make the testimonials a separate page. I never go to a testimonials page, as I don't believe them. However, if they are sprinkled through the sales copy, I will read them. As I read through them their positive words affect me and make me more trusting/willing to buy.
Polish the grammar. I noticed many spelling errors and word omissions.
I think that I would add some spice to the name. "Advanced Learning Method" or "DaVinci's Learning Method" or "Master Your Studies" or something exciting that I can't think of right now

[Zenit]

Changed. Any comments?

[clanshrapnel]

There are still a number of editing mistakes.

letal should be lethal.

imprving = improving

a boring book = at a boring book.

Some of these can be caught with a simple spell check tool (you can even copy/paste all of the text on this vBulletin reply tool and it will red-underline each spelling error that is obvious), but I would just advise you hire a copywriter, or at the least, a university student in the US, to check your sales copy.

As far as the viability of the site and whether it is a good idea, that's really more of a personal business decision above all else. Even if someone here says it's a good idea or bad idea, it still comes down to whether YOU think it will work or not based on your market research/intel. That will often surpass the knowledge of what anyone else has to say, provided you have put in the effort to research your muse. To give you an example, a university professor may tell you there is no way this concept will work and that students are not interested. But does a university professor necessarily have the web marketing know-how or have any statistics on certain keywords that may be popular in Google? Their input is limited to their exposure.

I say take the risk if you've done the research and it looks good, and don't worry about what other people think. What do you have to lose? How much experience will you gain, even if it's not a good idea?

On the other hand, if you HAVEN'T done adequate research, you know what to do...

[froldt]

I just want to echo what clanshrpanel said. Needs some editing. Some of the wording doesn't flow as smoothly as it should (purely as my experience as a native U.S. English speaker).

I still feel that the idea is sound and that you should go for it as long as you have done the necessary market research.

[Zenit]

BTW, and about the research made, after doing some in the Adwords Tools I'd noticed that there are only free sites about study skills, and they are something like: "Math tips", "Measurement Units" and "How to spell long words" (here (http://www.how-to-study.com/)).
This is focused at the Middle Education and University Students (14-25 years) and in the way of study. AND IS MORE SERIOUS (or at least more convicing :p).

There's a page that really bothers and worries me (this one (http://www.studygs.net/)), but just compare the quality of this website and mine.

Finally, I have the question that every 4HWWer has made: Is this gonna work?

But I won't know until I've tried. :D

[clanshrapnel]

BTW, and about the research made, after doing some in the Adwords Tools I'd noticed that there are only free sites about study skills, and they are something like: "Math tips", "Measurement Units" and "How to spell long words" (here (http://www.how-to-study.com/)).
This is focused at the Middle Education and University Students (14-25 years) and in the way of study. AND IS MORE SERIOUS (or at least more convicing :p).

There's a page that really bothers and worries me (this one (http://www.studygs.net/)), but just compare the quality of this website and mine.

Finally, I have the question that every 4HWWer has made: Is this gonna work?

But I won't know until I've tried. :D

muse owner = leader = (calculated) risk-taker

If you're immobilized by decision making, then muses are not for you.

You may also want to check the following sources for more research tools: Market Samurai, Google's own keyword suggestion/graphs, and running some CPC ads like 4HWW suggests. I would not solely rely on 1 source as the end-all to make your decision, but rather seek as many sources as you can and hope they confirm each other.

[storm33229]

Anne got an E? If you're trying to persuade the first graders in the world to buy your product, this might be a good way to do it, but most people get A, B, C, D, F.

[Zenit]

Hey I'm not inmobilized!

And yes, I may take a look at other sources.

[froldt]

Anne got an E? If you're trying to persuade the first graders in the world to buy your product, this might be a good way to do it, but most people get A, B, C, D, F.

I am not positive, but I think here at the state university I attend they use E instead of F. (I've never been anywhere near that mark, so I'm not sure and will probably never look into it.)

[Zenit]

Done some changes and finishing the ordering page.

The book is half made.

[Gina71]

Zenit - this is a great idea!

I like the idea of a learning method, but I want to know more.
Specifically, what do I get for my money? Music downloads? A user guide?
I'm new to this concept, but here are my thoughts...

Maybe you can begin with a headline or two that "grabs" them - something like "are you tired of spending hour after hour studying for your exams?"
"prefer to spend less time studying and more time with your friends?"

I agree with the comment about the testimonials - and that makes me want to change my own pages to sprinkle the testimonials through the text, so thanks!

I'm sure there is a Spanish speaking market for your product. There are millions of native spanish speaking students throughout the world. That's a niche market, isn't it? You can design your site and your product to appeal to that niche and you'll be the only one doing it. I say - go for it in Spanish!

I hope this is helpful. Good luck!
Gina71